I saw ELYSIUM last night. As my most anticipated movie of 2013 I was pretty excited to get into a press screening at the Arclight Hollywood. We were literally the last people in line, got the last passes, were the last to have our phones taken and bagged, and the last to enter the theater seconds before the light dimmed for the screening. That’s when an usher opened up a reserved aisle, and we got seats together in a perfect spot. Don’t know what the moral of this story is. Sometimes it pays to be late?

Anyway, the movie is entertaining and goes faster than a dropship breaking through Earth’s stuffy atmosphere, but I my feelings are I only liked it rather than loved it. The style and the execution of the world is amazing, and every frame is recognizable as a Neil Blomkamp film, but a lot of stuff doesn’t land. It follows Matt Damon’s character, a downtrodden worker human on Earth, as he tries to get himself to the orbiting ringworld of Elysium for urgent medical attention. He has five days to do it before he dies, and a bunch of people on Earth, as well as up in space, do not want that to happen (because they hate poor people? It’s never explicitly explained).

The real problem I had is with the film’s antagonists – for a start there’s too many. It muddies the plot to have not one, but four different people against the lead for different reasons. Specifically, Sharlto Copley’s character is a kind of government-sanctioned bounty hunter straight out of a comic book, and he really is the film’s weak point. He has ludicrous action, barely any motive and just a weird performance that doesn’t work at all.

There’s a bunch of little plot holes that don’t really bother me, but the general switching of stakes kept the story from really building to a nice ending. There was a goal, quickly achieved, then another totally separate goal that needed attention, and so on.

It’s entertaining, but not the genre-defining kick to the balls I was hoping for. Lower your expectations, cause Neil Blomkamp is human after all.


ScreamCraft Horror Script Contest Quarter Finalists

The ScreamCraft Horror Script Contest just announced their Quarter Finalists and I made the cut!

It’s a smaller contest, but it’s associated with The Blood List, and the judges panel includes development executives at Lionsgate, Paramount and Sony, which is awesome. (The Blood List is basically The Black List, but for horror only). So yeah – I’m one of 79 QF’ers – good luck to them all, I say. Here’s the full list: ScreamCraft Quarter Finalists


On Fellowships and Contests

Last year I entered lots of screenwriting contests, in essence to try them out and see which ones felt like they were run properly and had value. Of the five or six I entered, I only really liked the PAGE Screenwriting Awards and the Austin Film Festival Screenwriting Contest. The others were too sloppy (1998 called, it wants its web design back) or, in the case of the Nichols Fellowship and Zoetrope contest, not a good fit for the kind of scripts I write.

This year I wanted to enter new scripts into PAGE and AFF, and also try and branch out into entering the TV Writing Fellowships, namely the WB Writer’s Workshop, NBC Writer’s On The Verge and the Disney | ABC Fellowship. These are a little different than regular contests in that the are aimed at propelling you into a job in the television industry. If you get selected, you will be working with them for a year trying to achieve that goal.

To enter, you need to write a TV spec that is currently on the air and has been around for at least two seasons. I wrote a spec for THE SIMPSONS, partly because I wanted to do comedy, and partly because I can use it as a sample in the animation industry, where I have some contacts. There aren’t many sample Simpsons scripts out there (only transcripts, which aren’t helpful) but I managed to find an outline by Bill Oakley for an episode, and I followed that format. Wrote the outline in a day, and the first draft in under a week. I came out twenty pages short, so I had to go back to the outline and add in a nice chunk of second act business, then go back to the script and fill it out. I think it came out great, and it seems fresh to me, which I what I was aiming for.

Because all the fellowships have deadlines on basically the same day (end of May), there wasn’t much time left to perfect things. I just had to trust it was funny and submit it. Here’s where things get interesting. The fellowships have an additional requirement than screenwriting contests to enter – they want to know who you are and why we have a unique perspective on things. I entered the NBC WOTV first, and I kinda didn’t take it seriously. Although every word I wrote in my bio is true (I really did work with the director of Demolition Man on a shampoo commercial), as soon as I hit submit, I started thinking it might be too flippant for them. We’ll see.

For the WB Workshop, I cleaned up my act and submitted a bio I was really happy with. That one felt like it has a good chance. Lastly, the Disney Fellowship. Be prepared for this one, because they ask for a bunch of extra stuff, such as letters of recommendation from writing professionals, and they wanted it mailed to them on two CDs. If I knew I would have to take a trip to Office Max to buy obsolete media, I might have started on that one first. Anyway, I didn’t enter. It’s a shame because I could have got the two letters lined up and just about squeezed in the deadline (assuming everything went smoothly), but it’s a lot of stress for such a huge long shot. Ain’t nobody got time for that.

Overall, I’m excited about what I submitted. It always feels like progress when you’re sending finished work out the door, using the deadlines to get new work created. It’ll be interesting to see what happens.

Here’s some links:

WB Writers’ Workshop

NBC Writer’s On The Verge

Disney | ABC Writing Program

Austin Film Festival Screenwriting Competition

PAGE International Screenwriting Awards

Nicholl Fellowship

Zoetrope Screenplay Contest


My thoughts on the Black List

For those that haven’t heard of it, the Black List is a highly respected list that comes out once a year, cataloging the best unproduced scripts that have been circulating around Hollywood. It’s curated by Franklin Leonard, a very smart guy who I think takes great pride in the Black List’s record of scripts being turned into movies and picking up awards. (I think it’s something like 25 Oscars, which is an impressive stat). It’s an interesting and important project and Franklin has been expanding it in different ways throughout the last year.

The newest aspect of the Black List sees it opening up to aspiring writers, and having their work ranked alongside a database of past and current scripts by professionals. The idea is that the truly great work will rise to the top and a network of professional producers, agents and managers will be able to discover a great story they wouldn’t have found otherwise. It’s a wonderful idea in theory, but is it working as intended?

Let’s take a look at what’s currently working well:

The Good

They’re on it – Franklin Leonard has been talking at conferences, answering questions, listening to feedback, and been generally very responsive. They’ve already implemented some suggestions from users since launch. There’s a distinct plan behind the site, and some clever, experienced people involved. If nothing else, that’s reassuring.

The site is good – It’s clean, has some interesting stats and works well. There’s potential there, once they use all that data to do something interesting.

It’s not a con – At least, I don’t think it is. It’s an opportunity, with no strings attached. You can stop membership at any time and you don’t have to pay for reads if you don’t want to. (Although how you are supposed to get a rating without one, I don’t know). You retain all rights to your work and are free to go with anyone that contacts you regarding your script.

Now, some of the not so promising aspects:

The Bad

It costs a fortune – It really is the most expensive hosting plan in history. You pay $25 a month just for the privilege of being listed and having your script available for download. You can’t be listed without uploading a script, either. On top of that, you need to pay $50 for a reader to give your script a rating. On the site, there is a suggestion that you should get at least three ratings, so at a minimum, you’re looking at $75 for the least costly option (one month listing and one rating) and $450 for a year of hosting and 3 reads. That is extortionate.

You can’t edit your details – This seems like an oversight. You can’t edit anything once you’ve uploaded your script, so you better hope you get it right the first time. I think it’s because they don’t want people changing things randomly, but really, users should have some control over their own work and how it’s presented.

Slow response time – The site is busy right now due to the influx of new scripts, so you must wait up to two and a half weeks for your ranking score to come in. That’s half a month you’re paying for, while your script is parked and practically undiscoverable (unless someone knows the title or author, there’s absolutely no way to find it). Asking for your details to be edited also takes days, which is fairly unacceptable.

Bad value – In strict business terms, you’re paying for nothing, essentially. They promise you no more than a slightly random opportunity, but one that could just as easily be found by sending a query out to an agent and getting lucky. In fact, you’re paying to be listed in a database where no one can find you right now.

Scripts are buried and hard to find – There is really no mechanism to discover new scripts at the moment. I’m going to give them the benefit of the doubt here, because it’s early days and most scripts don’t have ratings yet. I’m sure there’s going to be some neat stuff in this area in the future. At least I hope. If not, it’s a dealbreaker.

The Verdict

So should you upload your masterpiece to the Black List right away? Honestly, I’d say take the approach of wait and see. There isn’t a really good argument for laying out $75 dollars right now, and definitely not one that improves on the old fashioned and (free) route of querying agents. There is also a weird us-and-them aspect to the site that I don’t feel comfortable with. You are an amateur paying out of your pocket to be listed alongside professionals, who not only have free access to the site and the bulk of ratings being given to them (as it should be, and I get why), but that can also see data and information that you can’t. You don’t know who looked at your script, who downloaded it, who read it, anything. You just have to pay up and wait.

I’m certain the site will evolve into something sleeker, with less clutter as bad scripts drop out, and more data as the good ones get placed into their correct positions. I can definitely see that it could become a rolling competition of monthly winners as really great scripts get attention (assuming the people who matter buy into the idea). Whether it will help them sell faster than they would normally, no one can really say.

I guess it’s great that there’s another avenue for aspiring writers, but I wish it wasn’t so expensive, one that will profit from many and reward few.


Christopher McQuarrie on writing

The most important thing I learned was this: everything can always happen much sooner, much faster, and with much less said about it.

So damn true.

Source: Go Into The Story


PAGE Awards Finalist

My script is now in the final ten scripts in the Science Fiction category of the PAGE Awards. The interesting thing about making it this far is that finalists are required to send in the latest draft of their script, which I think is helpful. I did a few re-writes, so I was glad I could submit an update.

The winners are announced on October 15.



A little comic that explains the set-up before the events in my script EXTRASOLAR. Think of it as viral content for a movie that doesn’t exist. Like those Alien ones with Mike out of Neighbours.


The Quest

I entered another contest. This is an interesting one. Scott Myers at Go Into The Story has been teaching screenwriters for years (one look at his blog should be enough to convince anyone of his altruistic tendencies) and with the huge blog presence and an affiliation to the Black list, he’s in a great position to help emerging screenwriters break through. The idea he’s come up to do that is called The Quest. I hope it involves swords and dinosaurs at some point.

The idea is to take four lucky writers and mentor them for six months, for free. At the end of the year, these four people should each have a completed script, Scott attached as producer, plenty of people willing to read them and a better understanding of the craft. That’s the idea, anyway.

I like it. Seeing as I arrived in Los Angeles less than two weeks ago (now that’s an overdue post) to do this kind of thing, it comes at a rather nifty time. To enter, you were required to send in your logline(s) and see if Scott picks one he’s excited about. He got something close to 4000. He’s looking for high-concept, very commercial stuff – something that would open on a lot of screens. I spent some time polishing my most extra high-concept loglines to make them short and concise and dutifully sent them off. I guess we’ll see. I’m ready for it.


Get your script read by Benderspink

If you want to get read by BenderSpink and support a good cause at the same time (let’s be honest, getting read is the real reason you’re gonna do this), head over to Done Deal Pro and check this post. $50 donation to the American Heart Association gets you 50 pages read by Daniel Vang.

I did it and I got an open door to submit new scripts in the future.


You can’t have it both ways

There’s an interview with David Simon on the New York Times website. I have the utmost respect for the guy, but this jumped out at me like a hoodlum in the low-rises:

The number of people blogging television online — it’s ridiculous. They don’t know what we’re building. And by the way, that’s true for the people who say we’re great. They don’t know. It doesn’t matter whether they love it or they hate it. It doesn’t mean anything until there’s a beginning, middle and an end. If you want television to be a serious storytelling medium, you’re up against a lot of human dynamic that is arrayed against you. Not the least of which are people who arrived to “The Wire” late, planted their feet, and want to explain to everybody why it’s so cool. Glad to hear it. But you weren’t paying attention. You got led there at the end and generally speaking, you’re asserting for the wrong things.

Am I crazy or is this a huge contradiction? People who critique a show before the end are ridiculous, but people who only watch it after the end aren’t paying attention. I’m so confused. When should I watch a series? From the beginning, middle or end? On cable, blu-ray™ disc, or DVR? When is it OK to talk about it?

Some guidelines might help. I just want to be in strict compliance here.


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